On 23 Jan 2015, at 16:41, Ben Coman <btc@openInWorld.com> wrote:
Some feedback on design I hope is useful.
Hi Ben, your feedback is useful, but I want to stress that this is not a design contest: it is developers marketing to developers. The goal is to advertise what we have. BTW, in terms of marketing, we already lost to these guys: http://gt.moosetechnology.org the two movies are hard to beat, right ? Luckily they are on our side ;-) Sven
* Citizen - I like the perpendicular layout of "cite" and "zen". I never got it before that it was for citations. Nice branding. Maybe you could put a mortar board hat on top of the big "C"
* Bloc - while considering copyright, maybe use a Tetris looking image for the background (http://tinyurl.com/ktpdvwg) or (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tetris#mediaviewer/File:NES_Tetris_Box_Front.jp...)
* Flow - I find the text under the storm-trooper a bit negative and confusing. I don't think you mean to imply that you can't actually do that in Smalltalk, which is the impression I got. Maybe something like... "Smalltalk _was_ the HTML5 single-page platform I was looking for!" or just...
Now the split of "consultants" over two lines grated, so I presumed to wordsmith your text... Flow's mission provides consultants, startups and software houses with a competitive full-stack Smalltalk framework for quick demo delivery with all the modern html5 features the market expects today (2014). Use tactically for gaining momentum with prospects and clients, then scale to full projects successfully delivered by kickass productive teams or individuals.
Try to get the bottom of the github link text to align with the bottom of the stormtrooper image, so the whitespace beneath is a full width rectangle.
You don't necessarily need to say what is the "front end" and what is the "back end". Deleting that text provides the opportunity to stack the three logos vertically, centred over the bottom left Qcode. Drop the "there" in "favourite there" so it doesn't overhang the Qcode.
Move the dots of the eyes to be looking at the word "flow" through the whitespace left by moving the logos.
(Sorry to go to town Sebastian, but I saw more potential.)
HTH cheers -ben
P.S. Sorry I don't have any of my own. I really should resurrect my masters project onto latest Pharo/Roassal.
On Fri, Jan 23, 2015 at 10:22 PM, Sven Van Caekenberghe <sven@stfx.eu> wrote:
On 23 Jan 2015, at 15:15, Esteban A. Maringolo <emaringolo@gmail.com> wrote:
Sorry, what are those?
I don't understand. :-/
These are 'posters' for the Pharo Project Expo for next week, afterwards they will become available online too.
You can make some if you like...
Esteban A. Maringolo
2015-01-22 17:36 GMT-03:00 stepharo <stepharo@free.fr>:
One on Voyage :)